New household appliances have resulted in more free time for women and has enabled them to both work and run a home with dependent children. What are the advantages for family when mother works? Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

With the rapid development of the technology, most of the household equipment has evolved and become fully automated appliances.
This
improvement leads women to have much free time to do a job and improve overall
income
to
family
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the family
a family
families
.
However
, if
both
the parents are working,
then
there is a high possibility
to
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for
children to misbehave. Because of the growing economy, living
cost
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costs
in every part of the world has increased enormously. If
both
parents are working, that can significantly increase the overall
income
. With a good
earing
(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence
hearing
earning
eating
, a family can have a luxurious life without any problem.
For example
, a recent study showed that 78% of economically stable families have
their
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both their parents
both
parents
work
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working
.
Thus
, it is good to have
both
mother and father working in a family, so, they can have more stable
income
. Even though, a steady
income
can provide all the necessities
to
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for
a family, without
both
parents at home, their children may do nasty things. Since they don’t have an adult to look after them, they will have enough freedom to play video games, watch adult contents on
internet
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the internet
or even can take drugs.
For instance
, a recent police report showed in Sri Lanka, 65% of teenage drug takers are with a family background where
mother
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the mother
is
also
working.
Hence
, having
both
parents working for a company may lead to have
detrimental impact
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a detrimental impact
on children's future. In conclusion, to face with the demanding basic requirements, it is
good
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best
if women
also
can contribute to strength the family
income
. But
this
can
also
lead to some devastating impacts on children’s life including drug addiction. In my opinion, despite the amount of money you get, mothers should stay at home and look after their children and lead them to have a better future.

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