The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with the problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Health
problems like obesity and diabetes are creating a stress on
hospital management system
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a hospital management system
by a number of masses, who are overweight. Some people consider that the best way to tackle with the situation is to introduce more subjects based on sports and exercise in
school curriculum
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the school curriculum
. I
am completely agree
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completely agree
have completely agreed
with the statement as young children will be aware of their
health
during growing stage of life.
First
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The first
and the foremost, reason to implement lectures on extra curricular activities encourages the students to indulge in daily exercise regimen.
This
method will ensure that the
next
generation will be healthier and will not have
such
health
diseases. When they will do exercise regularly
,
Accept space
,
they will grow up.
Moreover
, incorporating physical education subjects
,
Accept space
,
not only improve
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
of
individuals but
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individuals, but
also
keep them healthy physically and mentally. Another point to understand is that sports lessons in schools
involves
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involve
the children to play and
also
motivates the parents to take
interest
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an interest
in games. If their young one's participate in games at school levels, they will perform the same tasks at home.
As a result
, parents get involved to cooperate with their teenagers
,
Accept space
,
which is beneficial for both.
Hence
, parents as well as their children will get rid of
health
issues. In conclusion, to deal with
health
problems of unfit generation, it is important to add new
coures
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
course
courses
related
with
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to
physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
in academics.Government should take steps forward for
wellbeing
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the wellbeing
well being
of citizens.
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