Competitiveness among high school students should be encouraged. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, many schools are increasing competitions and exams to enhance educational and non-educational interest in their
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. I agree with
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positive action for the pupil’s bright future. There are several reasons why being competent is so
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important in school-age life for children.
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, it helps the student to develop their own personality. To elaborate
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, competitions always demand from
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for critical thinking, owning responsibility and guiding other colleagues to achieve the same goal.
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, a cricket match between two teams of school kids requires the attention of planning of allocating team members on the ground to save from the targeted runs.
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, the match needs one leader to take the responsibility to manage his team accurately to win
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the
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. All of these are beneficial parts in the development of their own personality in the pupils.
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, taking part in the
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will increase the interest of
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in the study or in any sports activity. Fortunately, sometimes
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into their lifetime professionalism.
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, to achieve the targeted goal in the exam,
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to research
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a particular subject to score high.
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research sometimes makes
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pupils
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more curious about that particular subject and
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them to do
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a master
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in the same, and
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professional
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professionals
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such
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as a wildlife photographer.
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, profit from
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helps the student to cover their financial burden.
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of any
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, there is always a prize for the winner. It might be in the form of a cash reward or a scholarship. Pupils from
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poor
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family
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can survive their educational expenses needs from it. In conclusion, conducting and encouraging
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to take part in
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competition
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competitions
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at
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early age
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school life can provide a great addition to their personal, professional and financial
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.

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