Some people say that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers who make greater contribution to the society should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The high
incomes of celebs in the field of sports and
have always been a matter of dispute. I disagree that doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than these celebrities. I shall put forth my arguments to support my views in the following paragraphs. No doubt that doctors, nurses and teachers are making a great contribution to
society but
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society, but
the contribution of these celebrities is
no less. They provide us
and inspiration and they
bring name and fame to our country. They are role models for the society and people follow them and listen to them. My
argument is that they have a very short career span. Most of the people in the sports and
field start their career at the age of 19-20 and retire
33-35 years. A doctor, teacher or nurse does not ever retire if he does not wish to.
For example
, my uncle is a doctor and even at the age of 94 he goes to his clinic for two hours every day. Whatever these celebs earn is during these few years and after that they face
a struggle
. Of course, there are
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exceptions, such
as the great legend Amitabh Bachhan but
examples can be counted on finger tips. My final argument is that these celebs sacrifice their personal life completely and so they do deserve these high salaries. They cannot enjoy the common things of life like the common man does. They are always followed by the paparazzi and their children
in the direction of
always need security.
is too much price to pay for the high salaries they receive. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that people in the field of sports and
well deserve their high incomes. Their services to the society are as important as, if not more, the services of doctors, teachers and nurses.
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