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Some people think that introducing new technology can improve people's quality of life in the developing countries. However, others believe that free education should be offered. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education
 and
technology
 are instruments for accelerating development in the developing countries. The issue of debate is whether new
technology
 should be provided in developing countries or free
education
 should be offered. I believe that a combination of
education
 and
technology
 has to be given. Those in favour of providing free
education
 say that these countries need
education
 before anything else. For the majority of underdeveloped countries, the quality of life is deteriorating despite several decades of development efforts. The gap between the developed and underdeveloped countries is
therefore
 widening by the minute. It is very imperative that swift steps be taken to bridge
this
 knowledge gap without which the economic and social disparity will widen even more rapidly. A good educational system should focus on laying the best foundation of knowledge and skill that are laid during the
first
 years of
education
. What these countries need is
good
Suggestion
better
education
 and training that can match the
technology
 revolution. Supporters of
technology
Suggestion
the technology
 say that most educational institutions in these countries lack quality educational materials. Library collections have become out of date and the laboratory equipment is most often old.
Therefore
, it would seem almost impossible for these countries to
setup
Suggestion
set up
 efficient educational systems without the availability of multimedia and information
technology
. What is more, students can use technologies to access courses not available at their school; rural students can complete their studies without leaving their communities, and adults can take advantage of a more flexible study schedule. Cultural development will
also
 benefit as knowledge-bases of art, culture and history can be easily created, made widely accessible and easily updated. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
Accept comma addition
down, saying
 that the best possible thing to do would be to provide both
education
 and
technology
 simultaneously. It would
also
 be a much cheaper alternative to provide
education
 with the help of
technology
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