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Some people believe that children should learn science in school. Others think that it is not necessary to include science in general education. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The debate over learning
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 has persisted for decades in modern society. Some people argue that children should study
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 in school,
whereas
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 others believe that
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 is not a critical subject in general education.
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 public opinion is divided, I firmly believe that it is necessary to learn
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 in childhood.
Science
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 should be compulsory in general education because, without it,
students
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 lack basic scientific literacy for health, technology, and civic decisions. Admittedly, some people claim that
students
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 have the freedom to choose their courses and subjects in modern society. Learning
science
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 may not be useful to
students
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 who major in business, history, or languages. Yet it is still necessary for primary
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 to learn
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. The main reason is that learning
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 can boost children’s abilities.
Science
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 courses often include lab sessions where children conduct experiments. It is helpful to teach children hands-on skills.
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, basic biology and numeracy help teenagers read a medicine label in mg per kg and avoid double-dosing. Energy literacy
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 allows families to compare an appliance’s kWh per year and choose an efficient model.
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, it is difficult to understand the theory of
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.
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, comprehending theory can stimulate children’s brains and develop their logical thinking.
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, a scientific theory often needs complex formulas to prove it. When
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 gather evidence, they might undergo a logical thinking process.
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, it is hard to find answers at
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and they might experience multiple failures.
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, their problem-solving skills are boosted by overcoming difficulties.
To sum up
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, it is not easy to measure the level of influence on a personal career from learning
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. From my perspective,
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 is a core subject and should be compulsory in elementary school. Once
students
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 enter high school and take responsibility for their choices, they can choose any courses they want.

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task response
Make your view clear in the first line and stay on that point through the essay.
task response
Give one or two clear reasons and use simple, real examples for each.
coherence cohesion
Use link words to show reason and result and to move from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea and keep a steady order from start to end.
coherence cohesion
Use shorter, simple sentences to keep flow and avoid long, tangled phrases.
content
Clear stance and view in favor of science in school.
structure
Intro, body and conclusion show good structure.
content
Good examples used to show how science helps (labels, energy use).
content
Some concrete reasons are given to support the point.
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