Using computers everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree.

Children start spending a lot of their time behind the
screen from a very early age.
using computers
to enhance
academic growth and critical thinking
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however I
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however, I
am of the opinion that young children operating
on a daily basis does more harm than good. There is no denying the fact that we live in a world dominated by technology. Some children have big imaginations.
For instance
, in
past there
the past, there
the past there
were only crayons and water
a flag that shows its nationality
to dispose their imagination on
paper but
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paper, but
in addition
to drawing they can create three dimensional animation on
the computer
and allow it to take physical form.
, earlier to gain information and knowledge children had to depend on books and
libraries but
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libraries, but
now they are exposed to a vast amount of information through computers which significantly enhances their academic knowledge.
, there are some drawbacks of operating computers on a regular basis.
Firstly children
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Firstly, children
who spend more time on
the computer
a computer
than with others their age fail to develop social skills. Social skills are important not only for communication but
to develop self esteem.
in turn leads to depression and loneliness.
, spending more time on
the computer
makes children lethargic. They tend to sit with
games whole day and lack of physical activities makes them obese.
obesity can contribute several other health problems as they grow older.
, children who indulge more with computers are exposed to a variety of things available online. They cannot use their conscience to know what is right and wrong. In conclusion, computers help children with their academics and
entertainment but
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entertainment, but
parents must monitor the number of hours their children spend behind
computer screen
a computer screen
the computer screen
computer screens
the contents
they browse.
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