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Using computers everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree.

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Children start spending a lot of their time behind the
computer
 screen from a very early age.
Although
 using computers
enhance
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to enhance
 academic growth and critical thinking
;
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;
however I
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however, I
 am of the opinion that young children operating
computer
 on a daily basis does more harm than good. There is no denying the fact that we live in a world dominated by technology. Some children have big imaginations.
For instance
, in
past there
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the past, there
the past there
 were only crayons and water
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
coolers
 to dispose their imagination on
paper but
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paper, but
 now
in addition
 to drawing they can create three dimensional animation on
computer
Suggestion
the computer
 and allow it to take physical form.
Also
, earlier to gain information and knowledge children had to depend on books and
libraries but
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libraries, but
 now they are exposed to a vast amount of information through computers which significantly enhances their academic knowledge.
However
, there are some drawbacks of operating computers on a regular basis.
Firstly children
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Firstly, children
 who spend more time on
computer
Suggestion
the computer
computers
a computer
 than with others their age fail to develop social skills. Social skills are important not only for communication but
also
 to develop self esteem.
This
 in turn leads to depression and loneliness.
Secondly
, spending more time on
computer
Suggestion
the computer
 makes children lethargic. They tend to sit with
computer
 games whole day and lack of physical activities makes them obese.
This
 obesity can contribute several other health problems as they grow older.
Thirdly
, children who indulge more with computers are exposed to a variety of things available online. They cannot use their conscience to know what is right and wrong. In conclusion, computers help children with their academics and
entertainment but
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entertainment, but
 parents must monitor the number of hours their children spend behind
computer screen
Suggestion
a computer screen
the computer screen
computer screens
 and
contents
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the contents
 they browse.
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