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Most people believe that stricter punishments should be given for traffic offenses. To what extent do you agree?

#people #punishments #traffic #offenses
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Motorists are often found in violation of
traffic
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 rules,
this
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 could be due to less policing, but
also
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 due to lack of respect for the
law
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. In my opinion,
traffic
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offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
 can be curtailed by stricter punishments as well as helping people understand the potential
consquences
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
 of violation. In recent years, there has been a sharp increase in the number of cars on the road. In most
situation
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situations
, vehicle owners are at fault for causing accidents because of their disregard for
traffic
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 rules. Generally, it is believed that laws backed by sanctions are effective in controlling violations, Laws which allow for stricter punishments often prevents people from infractions.
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, since the local
traffic
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 police has started implementing punish for those who do not wear
seatbelts
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seat belts
, the number of people actually wearing
seatbelts
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seat belts
 has drastically gone up. As Austin pointed out, whenever there is
threath
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the threat
threat
truth
 of punishment, more compliance can be seen.
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, on the flip side, there are those who argue that once the respect of laws is internalised, even if there is no one to check misconduct, people will often not break the
law
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.
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, if one is at a signal in the middle of the night with no sign of an officer or cameras, people who respect the
law
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, who have internalised the
law
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, will not break the signal.
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 type of internalisation will almost always be taught at a very young age.
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, to conclude, in my opinion, for immediate action, laws need to be backed by sanctions to control
misdeamour
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 and major violations.
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