It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people?

Some of the most debated
issue
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issues
of the society
has been
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have been
the extended to which unsalaried work will be beneficial or detrimental to the community and the youth. It is recommended by some people that the youth should serve
certain number
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a certain number
of years as a charity to help vivid communities. I shall discuss both the positive and the negative attributes of
this
view. There are some drawbacks of doing free service to associations.
First
of all, if adults take a break in their career or in studies it will be difficult for them to find employment after a gap.
That is
to say, companies may not consider it as a valuable experience and not offer them jobs as per their talent
.
Accept space
.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
a recent survey by Harvard university suggest that 37% men had to compromise of their work profile when they resumed working post taking a valid break
Nevertheless
, despite the above repercussions it has several benefits.
To begin
with, assisting people in community centres will be advantageous to students who want to
purse
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
higher education
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the higher education
in prestigious universities. These colleges look for students who are sensitive to the world and consider
this
in the admission process. To exemplify, students seeking admission in Oxford business school have an upper hand if they have volunteered for assisting people.
Furthermore
, if adults dedicate some time to the children at
orphanage
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the orphanage
an orphanage
they would feel accepted by the society.
This
is to say, people can educate them, share their experiences and help them to become responsible citizens in
future
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the future
. As an illustration, Times of India, has taken an initiative under the campaign “Teach India” where people can volunteer to teach underprivileged children for
few hours
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a few hours
every day. To recapitulate, earning good grades for admission and helping the underprivileged children by taking some years off work clearly outweighs any disadvantages.
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