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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the opinions of the most of the people, as a large number of institutions are obligated to teach pupils with facts from the very beginning, real-time technical experience goes missing from a student’s life. I do accord on the statement cause students find themselves in a difficult position because of less real-life experience and less modern education curriculum. Of crucial importance, in my opinion, is that students usually don’t receive pertinent field or organizational experience due to the constant academic pressure.
For instance
, a lot of effort one individual needs to put in her/his early career just for learning the practical applications in an organization because of not getting institutionalised other than
regular internship period
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a regular internship period
.
Furthermore
, traditional academicians tend to rely only on the theories rather than their implications.
As a result
, students remain as anyone but an adept employee in
working environment
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a working environment
the working environment
. There is,
however
, another possible way to not to support the statement which is that the authority falls behind for not updating the educational curriculum with the current trend. According to one recent report, most of the courses remain same for every 5 years due to resource limitation in Bangladeshi universities.
Also
, a rigid mindset for getting higher marks in the exam encourages our school and colleges to develop an autocratic ambience where life-changing skills are not valued. All the things considered, I am inclined to restate that learning skills will speak louder than just memorising facts.
Thus
, practical applications from the very beginning will definitely help our young
minds not
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minds, not
 only to
learn but
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learn, but
also
 to prepare for the real world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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