A government has the responsibility to ensure the safety of its citizens. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defense but spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

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It is argued that the government should increase its expenditure on

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

and decrease its expenditure on social benefits. I strongly disagree

Suggestion

with

this

opinion and think that social benefits have more significances than

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

First

of all, I believe that social benefits

such

as medical facilities, electricity, food are more essential than any other thing. The poor people do not care whether the

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

of the country is weak or strong. It doesn't mean that the government should stop spending on its

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

, it is

also

important.

However

, giving social benefits to its people is more important than spending a

hefthy

(of a person) possessing physical strength and weight; rugged and powerful

hefty

amount on its

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

For instance

, Pakistan has good fighter jets and strong missiles, but it is still not

been

the state or fact of existing

being

able to provide the kind of facilities it should provide to its public and that's the reason why the people are unhappy with their government as many of them do not get proper facilities.

Therefore

, it is I consider social benefits as a necessity for every country.

Secondly

, atom bombs and nuclear bombs can only cause more trouble to the society. Bombs are often made and purchased for the safety of the public,

however

misuse of these delicacies can cause hazardous consequence for the whole world.

For example

, North

Korean

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Korea

is one of the most powerful nations and because of some foolish leaders had made throttle for the whole world. That's why I strongly believe that the money spent on

such

bombs could be reduced and could be saved for the betterment of the society after having a decent number bombs for safety. To recapitulate, I reckon spending on social benefits are more essential than spending on

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

as it makes the people happy and motivated for paying their taxes.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

national security
deterrence
military technology
welfare programs
balanced approach
citizen welfare
adversaries
internal social issues
quality of life
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