A government has the responsibility to ensure the safety of its citizens. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defense but spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that the government should increase its expenditure on
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
and decrease its expenditure on social benefits. I strongly disagree
to
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with
this
opinion and think that social benefits have more significances than
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
.
First
of all, I believe that social benefits
such
as medical facilities, electricity, food are more essential than any other thing. The poor people do not care whether the
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
of the country is weak or strong. It doesn't mean that the government should stop spending on its
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
, it is
also
important.
However
, giving social benefits to its people is more important than spending a
hefthy
(of a person) possessing physical strength and weight; rugged and powerful
hefty
amount on its
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
.
For instance
, Pakistan has good fighter jets and strong missiles, but it is still not
been
the state or fact of existing
being
able to provide the kind of facilities it should provide to its public and that's the reason why the people are unhappy with their government as many of them do not get proper facilities.
Therefore
, it is I consider social benefits as a necessity for every country.
Secondly
, atom bombs and nuclear bombs can only cause more trouble to the society. Bombs are often made and purchased for the safety of the public,
however
misuse of these delicacies can cause hazardous consequence for the whole world.
For example
, North
Korean
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Korea
is one of the most powerful nations and because of some foolish leaders had made throttle for the whole world. That's why I strongly believe that the money spent on
such
bombs could be reduced and could be saved for the betterment of the society after having a decent number bombs for safety. To recapitulate, I reckon spending on social benefits are more essential than spending on
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
as it makes the people happy and motivated for paying their taxes.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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