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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been suggested that high
school
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 students should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high
school
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 programs. Most of the colleges are already providing opportunities to gain
work
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 experience,
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 these are not compulsory. In my opinion, sending students to
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 in community services is a good idea as it can provide them with many lots of valuable skills. Life skills are very important and by doing voluntary
work
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, students can learn how to communicate with
other
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others
 and
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 in a
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 how to manage their time and improve their organizational skills. Nowadays, unfortunately, teenagers do not have many after-
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 activities. After-
school
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 clubs are no longer that popular and
students mostly
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students, mostly
 go home and sit in front of the TV, browse
internet
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 or play video games. By giving them compulsory
work
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 activities with charitable or community organizations, they will be encouraged to do something more creative. Skills gained through compulsory
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 will not only be an asset on their CV but
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 increase their employability. Students will
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 gain more respect towards
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 and money as they will realize that it is not that easy to earn them and hopefully will learn to spend them in a more practical way. Healthy life balance and exercises are strongly promoted by the NHS, and
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 any kind of spare time charity
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 will prevent from sitting and doing nothing. It could
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 possibly reduce the crime level in the high
school
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 age group. If students have activities to do, they will not be bored and come up with silly ideas which can be dangerous for them or their surroundings. In conclusion, I think
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 is a very good idea, and I hope
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 program will be put into action for high
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 colleges shortly.
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