Question. You exercise regularly and have been a member of many different gyms. Recently you moved into a new neighbourhood and joined a new gym. You have noticed people at this gym do not bother to wipe down the machines after use and often leave dirty towels on the benches in the change rooms. Write to Mr Koto, the manager. In your letter: Explain who you are Describe the problem exactly Make suggestions to improve the gym

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Koto, I am a member at Gold gym, Ottawa branch since 15 days after I shifted to the apartment

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premises. I am recruited in a nearby high school as a sports teacher. I was a regular client in your

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branch before moving here. I am writing

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letter to suggest a few alternations in

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gym, which are inevitable from my point of view.

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, the prime issue is that people do not wipe the machines after using them for exercise. The sitting portion is often dirty due to perspiration. Due to

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, it is inconvenient for other people to perform their activities.

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, it has been observed by me that some members are habituated to leave wet towels on the seats inside the dressing room.

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odour in that specific area and becomes increasingly difficult to have a steam bath.

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, I would like you to improve the situation by making strict written rules to discipline all the members.

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, one should be given a penalty if they disobey any of the regulations.

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changes would not only be appreciated by me but

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would be admired by many of us. I hope you can empathize with my situation and would take the necessary action required. Yours sincerely Kausha.

drkaushapatel

Apr 20, 2019

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