Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be speant elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with that statement?

It is undeniable that, authorities could invest
proportion
Suggestion
a proportion
of their budget, which has been spent on the
art
, on
more vital
Suggestion
most vital
sectors. Adversaries of that notion,
however
, would put forward the idea that necessity of the
art
, which is on par with my accord. Above all, the arts,
such
as, musics or paintings, tend to have
salutary effect
Suggestion
a salutary effect
salutary effects
on
human's
Suggestion
human
psychology and nourishment of youngsters. The
art
can be considered as a not only reduction of the stress levels of
person but
Suggestion
a person, but
a person but
the person but
people but
persons but
also
as
a
Suggestion
an
essential tool to edify people's minds.
For instance
, as acute situations related to the psychology of
person
Suggestion
personality
can be ameliorated through the classical musics, paintings can shed light on the history of the place, as well as, expand
imaginary world
Suggestion
the imaginary world
of its audience.
As a result
, core subjects that are taught
at
Suggestion
in
the schools or universities, are by no means the only source of knowledge, but people will be able to acquire
knowedge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
and develop a sense for human sentiments through the arts,
parallelly
.
Furthermore
, the
art
sector, which contains
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
of workplaces in it, as an
artis
a person whose creative work shows sensitivity and imagination
artist
Otis
or singer,
for example
, possess its share in workforce in the country, if which is abridged,
copius
a reproduction of a written record (e.g. of a legal or school record)
copies
corps
of artists or the workforce, those jobs relate to them, would become jobless. To illustrate that, a museum
that is
provided by government's budget could be perfect example, in which
numerous of people are
Suggestion
numerous people are
working. Through
allocationg
distribute according to a plan or set apart for a special purpose
allocating
election
allocation
fiscal aid for the
art
section, not only the government
become
Suggestion
becomes
ingenioun
showing inventiveness and skill
ingenious
recepient
a person who receives something
recipient
recipients
via as tackling against the joblessness but
also
inhabitants are taking the benefit of it, as well, through provision of workplace. The conclusion to be drawn is that, perhaps the money
that
Suggestion
that's
spent on the
art
the 3rd planet from the sun; the planet we live on
earth
, could be invested
for
Suggestion
in
development another sector, but the
art
itself is one of the vital fields
that is
inalienable part
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an inalienable part
of the other sectors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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