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Fresh water reserves are becoming less worldwide. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions that can be done by countries and individuals?

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It is evident that fresh
water
 reserves are becoming scarce
globally
Suggestion
global
. 2.5% of the
globes
Suggestion
globe's
water
 is fresh
water
.
Although
 there are many reasons for the marked
decrease
 of reserves, they are not without solutions.
This
 can be done by both governments and individuals. For the remainder of
this
 essay I will outline the two main reasons behind
this
 problem: the increase in the global
population
 & the
decrease
 in the supply of fresh
water
.
Furthermore
, I will
also
 discuss solutions /
such
 as/ namely, the passing of new government legislations to control
water
 expenditure and the education of individuals on
water
 conservation. There are many reasons for the rise in demand in fresh
water
.
Firstly
, with the increase in
population
, comes an increase in
water
 consumption.
For example
, in 2005 during the world’s highest
population
 peak, the amount of fresh
water
 decreased by 0.3%. Another reason for the marked
decrease
 of fresh
water
 resources is none other than global warming. Time and time again we hear about global warming and its dangers all over the media. It has a direct correlation to
this
 very cause. As temperatures
decrease
, more
water
 is frozen and turned into glaciers,
therefore
 it becomes unattainable for our use.
For instance
, in 2005, the state of Alaska reported the spike in the formation of the number of glaciers by 20%. Despite the many issues, there are many measures that can be taken by both the authorities and individuals to tackle them. Governmental laws can be implemented,
such
 as: limiting
water
 consumption through minimizing the number of times someone can wash their car.
This
 was proven successful in the UK. Until today, people are limited to washing their vehicles once a week, which has resulted in a 50%
decrease
 in weekly
water
 usage throughout the kingdom.
In addition
, individuals may participate in
water
 awareness campaigns, organized by
neighborhoods
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 to educate the
population
 on efficient ways to preserve
water
. Personally, in my local community I was taught to count the seconds I use my tap for and ensure it doesn’t surpass 30, which has helped and benefited me in
water
 conservation. In conclusion, the acknowledgment of the causes just discussed and by the application of these solutions, we may help alleviate the issue of decreased fresh
water
 reserves worldwide.
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