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You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task. As part of a class assignment you have to write about the following topic. Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? Give reasons for your answer. You should write at least 250 words

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The total human population is a staggering eight billion, and growing every
second
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. The number of languages spoken throughout the
worls
everything that exists anywhere
world
 is truly remarkable.
However
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, it can be seen that there is an exodus of people travelling to native
English
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 speaking countries, to name a few - Americal, Australia and Britain, their
pourpose
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
purpose
purposes
 is to
entroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
en troll
 in schools, colleges and universities. In
this
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 essay, I would like to express my opinion for
this
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 mass migration and what exactly makes
English
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such
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 a vital
language
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. In the eighteen century, Britain had established its dominance throughout the world. It had colonies
throughtout
all the way through
throughout
 the world and was known as the
kingdome
a domain in which something is dominant
kingdom
 on which the sun would never set.
This
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 mighty
british
of or relating to or characteristic of Great Britain or its people or culture
British
 empire was the main reason for the spread of
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english
Suggestion
the English language
English language
language
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. Consequent to that, major nations
such
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 as India, Pakistan started to use
English
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 as their
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second
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second language, even
language
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 even after their independence.
Also
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, due to the technological
advancementof
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advancement of
 the
british
of or relating to or characteristic of Great Britain or its people or culture
British
 empire, students pursuing higher education had no other option other than to
lear
gain knowledge or skills
learn
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
, on account of the books written by
reviered scientist
Suggestion
a revered scientist
revered scientist
 was available only in the
English
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 languages. Even today, most of the developed countries
has
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have
have had
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 as their
first
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language
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 and it is in these developed
countries
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country's
 quality educational institutes
such
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 as Yale, USC
are
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is
existant
having existence or being or actuality
existent
,
thus
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 giving no other
optiontion
Suggestion
 to students from native non
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 speaking countries to
immegrate
migrate to a new environment
immigrate
emigrate
migrate
 and get a chance to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
 success. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate the fact that due to the technological advancement of
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 speaking countries and their influence on the world, It has become imperative for
people dreaming
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people, dreaming
 to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
 high rank in success to learn
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 and gain
quality education
Suggestion
a quality education
 from theses native
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 speaking countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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