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In most parts of the world people are living longer. What are the possible causes of this situation? Is this a negative or positive development?

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Recently, some
 countries' death rate has decreased dramatically.
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 may be due to different reasons;
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 essay will analyse the main causes and discuss whether it brings benefit or drawback to the enhancement of the society
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 and foremost reason for
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 scenario is the revolution of health care technology.
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 is because the fatal diseases or disorders which were considered difficult to fight against have become an easier task to tackle these days. Polio is one good example in India which no longer causes death or disorder among
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people, which
 once was a very devastating disease.
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, the technical advancements are
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 facilitating complicated cardiac surgeries, organ transplantation and 3D printed organ replacement. So these illustrations are proving the worthy role of technology in enriching and enhancing of people’s
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. While the
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 span of individuals’ increases, it would obviously benefit in several ways both to individual and society. As far as a single person is concerned, if he lives longer
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 it is certain that he would complete all his responsibilities in a proper way and lead a happy and contented
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 with his or family. Looking onto the other side, the benefits outnumber the disadvantages here as well. Due to the contribution of persons like scientists, politicians and other leaders to the nation for a longer duration, the development of the nation is a reachable goal. By and large, the people are having
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a healthy and longer life
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 because of the intervention of technology in the health care sector.
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 has been proven as a positive impact on both individuals and a larger community and
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 can be taken as a sign of betterment.
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