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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants. Do you agree or disagree?

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Eating healthy and tasty
food
 is everyone’s
first
 choice to become fit and healthy. Some are of the view that single people and family should opt for preparing and having
food
 at
home
 while other things
otherwise
. I certainly assert
this
 notion as preparing and eating
home
 is not only
healthy but
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healthy, but
also
 economical unlike eating out. Fresh vegetables and oils are of the paramount importance in order to harness the real nutrient of the
food
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food, however
however
, It is almost unlikely that
consumer
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consumers
the consumer
a consumer
 can gauge the
quality
for
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of
 content which was being used
for
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in
 the
food
 we intake in restaurants and cafes.
Additionally
, having a meal out
at
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of
 your best cafe or restaurant is often an expensive affair for
an
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a
 normal income person which could easily disturb the finance for
whole month
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the whole month
.
On the other hand
, preparing
food
home
 surely ensures us the
quality
 of the
food
 that we are eating. As we know our
food
 ingredient, specially vegetables and oil better as to, how and how much to use in order to prepare healthy and tasty meal.
Also
, as far as opting for ingredient is
concern
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concerned
, people can certainly shop for better
quality
 material which is good for cuisine and healthy.
Furthermore
, it
also allow
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also allows
 people to save enough amount of money, when they eat
home
 because
food raw material
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the food raw material
 and staples are usually affordable since brought in quantity. All things said, preparing
food
 and eating
home
 usually ensure best
quality
food
 due to usage of optimum
quality
 ingredients and cheap
also
 since
only raw material
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the only raw material
 is needed to prepare
food
 which is affordable.
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