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Should people get a job right after school or should they attend university. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Some individuals say that the students should get a job after the
school
, while some others argue that the students should
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 themselves
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the
university
. Each aspect got its own pros and cons, in my opinion,
student
Suggestion
the student
students
 should get a
work
 experience before they go to the
university
. Working after a
graduation
Suggestion
graduated
 from the
school
 gives the younger generation a unique advantage at the very early age because it will them to assess their capabilities and it
also
 gives them enough time to figure out the career path. Nowadays, many multinational companies
are preferring
Suggestion
prefer
 the fresh graduates who have some sort of earlier
work
 experience.
However
, there is a downside to
this
, many students, especially in the western hemisphere might stop going to
university
 for higher education. The developing countries like India the concept of working after the
school
 do not even exist, parents usually do not allow their kids to
work
 until the graduation is completed. Going to the
university
 for the higher education immediately after the
school
 allows the students to completely concentrate and excel in the academics without worrying much about the other problems.
This
 creates a unique challenge for the graduates, they might not get the opportunity to assess their strength and weakness in the real life and some of them might choose a wrong career path.
For example
, I didn’t
work
 until I graduated from the college and it took 3 years and multiple job switches to figure the job I’m passionate about. To conclude, in my opinion, the students that
work
 after graduating from the
school
 will have an edge in choosing the successful professional career
then
 the students that
doesn’t
Suggestion
don’t work
work
.
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