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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Trees play a vital role in having life on the planet blue. Many individuals believe that rather than spending on real estate building structure in
urban area
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urban areas
an urban area
, it is better to do more for plantation drives. I fully support the notion. It is irrefutable to say that with the growing population
on
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of
 the earth, the need of having more land for housing is
also
 surging.
This
 has been resulted in cutting
down of the jungle
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down the jungle
 area to match with
demands
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the demands
 of the citizens. So, in return the global warming has been increased and
also
 health issue of common man has seen
rise
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a rise
rising
 from
last few decades
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the last few decades
.
Thus
, to have
better quality
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a better quality
 of air index we should all focus on having more trees. Generally, the trees or forests are
natural home
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a natural home
the natural home
natural homes
 for other species.
Hence
, to build a home by destroying others home is not a sane thing to do. To add on, the
dooms day
(New Testament) day at the end of time following Armageddon when God will decree the fates of all individual humans according to the good and evil of their earthly lives
doomsday
 has arrived when the governments of all nations ought to get unite and take some strong and quick actions toward saving the environment, else there will natural disasters coming on the way. The green area and parks should be built and it significances should be promoted to not get destroyed by the local people. To recapitulate, the building houses can solve the problem of people moving towards cities or towns.
However
, in the long run the effect will be catastrophic. The trees are
free source
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free sources
 of
gases mainly
Accept comma addition
gases, mainly
 oxygen,
that is
 required for living beings to survive.
Moreover
, these are the only spaces for many birds.
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