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Some people think it is better to give donations to local charitable organizations, while others choose to give to national or international bodies. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #donations #organizations #bodies
Addressing the social cause through the charitable activities and donations to the institutions is a known process where individuals based on their interest or inclination, give away in
form
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the form
a form
 of the cash or kind. Instantly, debatable aspect is giving
donation
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a donation
 to local or national/international bodies. In
this
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
easy
issue
, I will discuss about both
way
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ways
 of
donation
 and give my opinion on why I believe in giving
donation
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a donation
 to local charities.
For instance
, local
organizations having
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organizations, having
 a limited
resources
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resource
 and understand local problems comprehensively. The donations to
this
groups
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group
 will lead to instant result and we can directly see the impact in short duration of time.
However
,
this
institution not
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institution, not
 having a well defined system or process and mostly driven by person centric and some time led to
surreal result
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the surreal result
 of donations.
For Example
, A leading non-profit in India - PRADAN, works extensively
on
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in
with
 the tribal community in
rural part
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rural parts
a rural part
 of the country.
However
, there are increasingly global charities working on issues or theme led social problem.
For instance
, organisations like PETA
work
 on the animal abuse at global level.
This
institutions
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institution
having
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has
 a better system and processes to deliver the
work
, but major portions of
donation
 will go towards internal process/overhead.
Also
, there would be clear co-relation between the donations and its impact
at
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on
of
ground
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the ground
 as it will take years to see major changes led by international organizations. Like, Gates Foundation - A global
persoal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
 charity,
work
 on maternal health in the developing world and real impact required years of dedicated
work
. In a nutshell, both
category
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categories
 of charity organizations come with pros and cons. In my opinion, I will firmly believe in donating to local bodies as I clearly see and track the utility of money and not allow squandering the money.
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