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Women should have an equal role alongside men in both police and armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#women #role #men #police #forces
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Some people claim that
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police
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the police
 and armed forces should define equal responsibilities for men and women. I completely agree that women should have an equivalent place to men in armed forces and
police
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.
Firstly
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,
police
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 and armed forces require general work which varies from documentation to fight, and
woment
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
 can accomplish most of these tasks with as much confidence as men.
For example
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,
police
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 departments and army need officers, phone operators and computer scientists and these
type
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types
 of work does not require any special kind of men-work.
Also
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, duties
such
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 as
investigation
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the investigation
investigations
 or fighting requires skills to be provided by a strict training, and women who receive
such
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 kind of education have
high
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higher
 success rates alongside the cross gender.
Therefore
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, women can contribute these organizations at the same level with men. Another point to discuss is the different viewpoints of women and men bring more accurate handling of armed and
police
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 forces. Women have a complex and detailed insight of
world
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the world
, while men have a direct logic with a focus on complete image of the situations. These varying opinions enrich the perception on issues in
such
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 organizations which are established for social reasons. Incidents including women criminals can be resolved in a prompt manner when policewomen
investigates
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investigate
 them, because they can quickly get the point of the criminal since they share the same gender. Even if the case does not include women criminals, policewomen can make people
to look
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look
 from another facet of the case, making possible to develop a more realistic action plan rather than a poor planning. In conclusion, women should have equal roles and responsibilities with men in armed and
police
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 forces, because they are equally capable of doing the required duties and having different opinions will improve the efficiency of these organizations.
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