Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is argued that, setting up a
retirement
age say
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fore
.g. 65 years for everybody, regardless of occupation is unfair.
This
essay agrees with that and explains how people will get affected if the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
bring up the rule of setting up the same
retirement
age for all employees. There are several
kind
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kinds
of workers in the country. Some of them belongs to white collared job, where they will not have to strain their body and put more effort. Whereas, daily wages people
has
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have
to put
lot
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a lot
of efforts
at
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in
on
their daily work which causes pressure in them and leds to various health issues. At one point of time, after working for several number of years, workers like mechanic, machine man would end up in health issue and which will result in the drop of interest in working. In
this
case, early
retirement
option will be really helpful for them in order to get the pension and settle at home and take care of the health. To conclude, setting up the same
retirement
age for all the workers is not
an
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a
good idea. As each and every
workers
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worker
are not doing
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is not doing
the same kind of job. Some may have less pressure and strain and vice versa. If
government
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the government
a government
imposes the
rule
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rule, then
then
certain people will get more affected mentally and physically at their 50's due to work pressure and strain and it may lead to death.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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