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Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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retirement
 age say
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.g. 65 years for everybody, regardless of occupation is unfair.
This
 essay agrees with that and explains how people will get affected if the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 bring up the rule of setting up the same
retirement
 age for all employees. There are several
kind
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kinds
 of workers in the country. Some of them belongs to white collared job, where they will not have to strain their body and put more effort. Whereas, daily wages people
has
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have
 to put
lot
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a lot
 of efforts
at
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in
on
 their daily work which causes pressure in them and leds to various health issues. At one point of time, after working for several number of years, workers like mechanic, machine man would end up in health issue and which will result in the drop of interest in working. In
this
 case, early
retirement
 option will be really helpful for them in order to get the pension and settle at home and take care of the health. To conclude, setting up the same
retirement
 age for all the workers is not
an
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a
 good idea. As each and every
workers
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worker
are not doing
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is not doing
 the same kind of job. Some may have less pressure and strain and vice versa. If
government
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the government
a government
 imposes the
rule
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rule, then
then
 certain people will get more affected mentally and physically at their 50's due to work pressure and strain and it may lead to death.
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