Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

It is true that today one can spend his free
time
watching their favourite films and playing interesting games, as everything is available at any
time
through their mobiles, tablets, laptops and desktops which has its own benefits and drawbacks. I believe
pros
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the pros
overweigh the cons of
this
development if these are used within
limits
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the limits
as overuse of everything is bad. On the one hand, one can spend their free
time
enjoying their favourite movies and games. They don't feel alone at any
time
with the smartphone in their hand. One can kill their lonely
time
by starting a movie.
In addition
to
this
, It helps people to connect with other members who play the same games. I have seen people discussing about the games, which are in trend, which in turn give rise to communication.
Also
, people can play quiz games where the person who is
fastest
Suggestion
fast
to answer will win. These
type
Suggestion
types
of games
helps
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help
building their knowledge base as well as are seen as a positive development.
On the other hand
, when people start giving priority to the electronic gadgets
instead
of other people around them
then
it makes things unpleasant. To add to
this
, these things have a negative impact on
children growth
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a child's growth
child's growth
children's growth
child growth
as they prefer to spend most of their free
time
watching movies and playing games
instead
of socializing with their friends and family members and the same trend is seen in adults and older people. Apart from
this
, these have numerous side effects on people's health
such
as weaken eyesight. To summarize, everything comes with its own advantages and disadvantages. Access of anything is
bad so
Accept comma addition
bad, so
if the latest gadgets are used in a controlled manner to watch films and play games
then
it proves to be fruitful. Alternatively, if these things start replacing people around you
then
it is considered to be a negative development.
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