Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that today one can spend his free

time

watching their favourite films and playing interesting games, as everything is available at any

time

through their mobiles, tablets, laptops and desktops which has its own benefits and drawbacks. I believe

pros

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the pros

overweigh the cons of

this

development if these are used within

limits

Suggestion

the limits

as overuse of everything is bad. On the one hand, one can spend their free

time

enjoying their favourite movies and games. They don't feel alone at any

time

with the smartphone in their hand. One can kill their lonely

time

by starting a movie.

In addition

this

, It helps people to connect with other members who play the same games. I have seen people discussing about the games, which are in trend, which in turn give rise to communication.

Also

, people can play quiz games where the person who is

fastest

Suggestion

fast

to answer will win. These

type

Suggestion

types

of games

helps

Suggestion

help

building their knowledge base as well as are seen as a positive development.

On the other hand

, when people start giving priority to the electronic gadgets

instead

of other people around them

then

it makes things unpleasant. To add to

this

, these things have a negative impact on

children growth

Suggestion

a child's growth

child's growth

children's growth

child growth

as they prefer to spend most of their free

time

watching movies and playing games

instead

of socializing with their friends and family members and the same trend is seen in adults and older people. Apart from

this

, these have numerous side effects on people's health

such

as weaken eyesight. To summarize, everything comes with its own advantages and disadvantages. Access of anything is

bad so

Accept comma addition

bad, so

if the latest gadgets are used in a controlled manner to watch films and play games

then

it proves to be fruitful. Alternatively, if these things start replacing people around you

then

it is considered to be a negative development.

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Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money should be invested better in other areas. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Since the beginning of the 20th century, the number of endangered species has increased significantly and we have witnessed more mass extinctions in this period than in any other period of time. What problems arise from this and how can they be tackled?