Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Unpaid
community
service
such
as joining a volunteer work is considered by some of the people to be a necessary part of secondary school activities. From my point of view, I strongly agree with
this
perspective as it is an activity which contains benefits to
younger generation
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the younger generation
younger generations
.
First
and foremost, while doing unpaid
community
service
, students have the higher possibility to develop social and working skills that are unable to learn from
textbook
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a textbook
textbooks
. The
different
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difference
between unpaid
community
service
and
a
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an
employment is just about volunteer and having
salary
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a salary
. Indeed, most of the work in a
community
service
is similar with a job. Owing to
this
, ones can definitely learn some working and social skills when participate in
this
kind of activities.
Furthermore
, due to
this
, people can have the higher opportunity to find a better
jobs
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job
after they graduate.
However
, some of the people support the opinion that working for unpaid
community
service
is a waste of time. They commonly believed that
this
kind of activities will deprive their study time.
Nevertheless
, take part in unpaid
community
service
can help people to increase confidence and become
a
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an
optimist person.
For instance
, I have joined a volunteer
service
club when I am a secondary school student. When doing all the work and participate in those activities, I found out that I have changed my personality from fearful to
brave
draw air into, and expel out of, the lungs
breathe
.
Hence
, I become a
confidence
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confident
person. In the conclusion, unpaid
community
service
provide
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provides
many merits to high school students,
therefore
it is necessary for them to participate in
this
activity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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