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The older you get, life becomes more difficult. Discuss.

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The hardest truth to accept is the fact that ‘as we
age
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,
life
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 becomes more difficult’. When we’re young, we often live in an illusion that we can easily control everything. But the reality is that everything has its limit, including
life
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. Sooner or later, in
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, we reach a point where we have to learn to accept things as they are -
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 of controlling or trying to manipulate them in our favour. It’s a ‘wake up call’ to remind us that
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 is not pre-planned. As we get older, probably the very
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 thing that we learn is to let go of some of our dearest friends or loved ones. Some get married,
some get busy with
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get busy with some
 work, or some move away. No matter what the situation is, some people in our
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 do drift apart as time goes by. Aging is another big factor that somehow makes our
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 even more difficult. While aging is inevitable, most of us somewhere believe that we still have not lived enough or have not gained enough experiences as per our rapidly increasing
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. Some of us even regret going through a wrong career path or taking the wrong decision that impacted their entire
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 because of that single decision. We often get caught up in work and other
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 situations to the extent that we even forget about our parents. But
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 hits us hard when we realize that our parents are
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 aging like us. Watching them get older or dying in front of your eyes due to a certain medical condition is indeed one of the most difficult situations in
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. At a certain phase of our
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, we’ll even start facing different body-related issues like lack of energy and less enthusiasm at work.
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, our health graph begins to drop with
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. While there are many advanced technologies and devices to help us upkeep our healthy lifestyle, there comes a time when we do have to rely on others for medical attention or care.
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 means no matter how hard we try to achieve everything in
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, there will be some things or desires that will remain as dreams or even fade away with
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. All we can do is just to learn to live our
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 to the fullest with whatever we already have - since we are always unaware of what’s in store for us at every turn of
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