The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

In our contemporary world, an
accruement
of committing crime has become in inherent, especially amid the youngsters. In order to tackle
this
problem increasing
parents
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parents'
parent
roles in their children’s life is seen promising whereas adversaries’ aspect, which is on par with mine, rests on presence of alternative solutions. Perhaps the thing to acknowledge is that parents possess
major impact
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a major impact
in
next
generations’ life as a role model,
for example
. Not only does youngsters implicate to their
parents but
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parents, but
also
they are the one who
take
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takes
responsibility for their good manner.
For instance
, offenders stem from
negative milieu
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the negative milieu
a negative milieu
in their family with high contingency which is headed by parents.
Consequently
, through
eradication
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the eradication
of inclination for crimes and nourishing with efficient techniques about how to bring up children,
this
issue may be addressed partly. From other prospective, it is undeniable that the atmosphere that covers the children does not consist of just
family but
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family, but
other external impacts are present as well, that may bewilder or seduce the
youth
and they must be taken into consideration. To illustrate that, circle of friends that surrounds the
youth
can be perfect example, if which is abound with crime-inclined people, that would
beget
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be getting
be get
the chance to make
this
youth
as
a
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an
offender too.
Additionally
, friends are by no means the only factor that cajoles the
youth
to commit
crime but
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crime, but
teachers at school, where children spend their hefty proportion of time.
Hence
,
remedy
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the remedy
a remedy
for
this
acute situation should cover amendments in terms of parenting
skills but
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skills, but
also
every single external impact should be faced with elevations in terms of positive manner. The conclusion to be drawn is that, acquiring vital knowledge about up bringing children by parents cannot be panacea. In that case,
instead
just zero in on parents other aspects should be contemplated equally.
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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