In the past, two decades, crime has been on the rise. To prevent further increase, criminals should be sentenced longer period of prison time. However, some people say there are alternative ways to control cr

Number
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The number
of criminals in Thailand has been
increase
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increasing
significantly compare to the past. People who commit crimes that are locked up in prison sometimes get an excuse for release. It is suggested that longer period of jail-time can decrease crimes while some still think that other punishments should be used. Criminals who commit serious crimes in Thailand
such
as raping, stealing or amusing will be locked up in jail.
However
, if these people pay bail, they will be released or if worst case, they will be offered a less time in jail.
This
causes an unconscious mind to criminals and they might repeat the crime again.
Hence
, some people think that longer period of prison-time can
leads
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lead
to reduce of criminals as it builds conscious in criminal’s consideration which means they will think more carefully before they act.
Nevertheless
, another group of people disagree
to
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with
this
opinion. They suggested that plenty other ways can be
use
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used
to reduce crimes. One
ways
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way
is that, Thai’s government should add stricter law for criminals
such
as not excepting bails and make criminals do
voluntary
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volunteer
works
Accept comma addition
works, for
for example
, treating older people,
this
will make criminal knows how difficult others live and
also
criminals will feel guiltier and thinking that getting away with crimes is not as easy as they think. To conclude, both
longer
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long
time in jail and stricter law are effective in declining crimes in Thailand. Though, in my opinion, government should be more serious with criminal law so that crimes can be
decrease
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decreased
immediately.

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