You would like to join the local orchestra. Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice – Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate – Express your enthusiasm for music

I am writing
this
letter to express my interest
regarding
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the various position available in the sole mate
cachestra
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orchestra

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Last
day I saw an
adverts
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advert

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in a local newspaper. My name is Mary and I have completed my bachelors in Music.
Basically
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,Basically

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I am a violinist
,
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apply

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but
also
studied flute
from
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a Private institution.I have a few years experience in
violine
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violin

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Firstly
,I enrolled in a small music group which is run by Fr. Alex. who is a priest in St. Francis Church .
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,
i
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I

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played violin in some reality Shows. After completion of my degree, I would like to improve and learn more about other instruments. I am a gold medalist from
Madurai
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the Madurai

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violin competition. I think these credentials are the plus point in my career. - I would appreciate
if
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it if

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you could consider me
to
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your orchestra . It will be a create pleasure if you could provide for me. My resume is attached with
this
letter and
consider
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considers

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me as soon as possible. I am looking forward to
hear
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hearing

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from you. yours faithfully Mary.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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