Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such place?

Exploring the unexplored places is
becoming point of
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becoming a point of
interest to some travellers.
Tourism industry
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The tourism industry
is on boom due to more people taking interest in visiting extremely adventurous places. The experience gives tourist a sense of satisfaction and
enjoyment but
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enjoyment, but
some dangers are
also
associated with it. In
this
essay I shall discuss merits and demerits of visiting
such
places. On the positive side,
such
journeys
give
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are given
a life changing experience to the travellers. On successful completion of
tour
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the tour
they can smell a sense of achievement.
Also these
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Also, these
tours pours new energy and bravery in tourist, which works as
motivational factor
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a motivational factor
,
consequently
, it can be helpful in
work
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the work
. Apart from
this
,
such
trips
also
measures physical and mental capacities of tourist, which gives
idea
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the idea
that where one stand in case of fitness and how one is capable to make judicious decisions in critical conditions. It is seen in some
corporates
of or belonging to a corporation
corporate
in India that they recruit and promote person with more exertion who have completed difficult tours. On the down side, these places are full of pitfalls. Needless to say that Weather always becomes
enemy
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an enemy
enemies
the enemy
with sudden extreme cold or heavy rainfalls.
For example
, 26 hikers died during trekking in Mount Everest due to heavy snowfall.
Additionally
, excellent health and mental power is crucial to accomplish
such
trips. A little stress or strain can spoil
whole journey
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the whole journey
.
Moreover
, a danger from unfamiliar wild animals and insects is always there. In conclusion, looking
to
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for
into
the benefits of visiting dangerous places, it is only advisable to go
in
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on
such
trips if the person is physically fit and mentally alert,
also
proper planning and understanding weather forecast is necessary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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