In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

Many nations seeing displacement of people from the countryside to the cities. Increasing
unemployement
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
, decreasing farming and fast pace of city life are the main reasons behind
such
a development. In
this
essay, we will see how decreased job opportunity have caused people to relocate to the cities and how
this
will affect the economy of the country. The root cause behind
such
a momentum is the increased unemployment in the rural areas of the countries, caused mainly due the downfall of the agriculture. In most of the
countries
Suggestion
country's
main occupation in the countryside is
farming but
Accept comma addition
farming, but
, due to changing climate and weather conditions, it is badly affected and farmers are not even able to get the yield for the
investement
the act of investing; laying out money or capital in an enterprise with the expectation of profit
investment
they made for
corps
Suggestion
the corps
.
For example
, Srilanka
is seeing
Suggestion
has seen
drought since
last
three consecutive
years which
Accept comma addition
years, which
has badly affected the farming in the villages due to lack of water for irrigation, and almost 10% of farmers
has
Suggestion
have
to
moved
Suggestion
move
to Colombo city to find out jobs. If people from the villages keep moving to the cities and farming becomes obsolete, the only option government is left with, is to import the grains from other nations, which in turn
wiil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
incur huge cost, because, there are multiple taxes needs to be paid and currency conversion and transportation charges
also
needs to be paid for importing of grains or any other good from different countries.
For example
, China
have inccured
Suggestion
has incurred
have incurred
a loss of $8,000 Million due to increased
import
Suggestion
imports
from India by 11%. To conclude,
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
is the major cause behind the movement of people from the villages to the cities,
however
,
this
needs an attention from the government as
such
a development will endanger the economy of the country.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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