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Topic: Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Sample answer: Boosting
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 on roads is a debatable issue. Some people argue that imposing tight limitations on speed is the best approach to tackling dangerous
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 accidents while others disagree.
This
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 essay will discuss why reducing speed can be an efficient strategy, but why enlarging
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 networks and encouraging the
use
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 of public
transport
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 are ultimately superior strategies.
First
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 and foremost, lowering
speed
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the speed
 on highways and motorways is an effective solution to the increasing number of accidents and car crashes as excessive speed has always been reported to be the main cause
for
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of
 deadly injuries and loss of life in many countries around the world.
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, in many European countries, detailed government reports about
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security
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 in 2015 show that a staggering 50 to 60
per cent
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percent
 of total accidents reported were caused chiefly by speed. The report results pushed many governments to consider putting caps on the speed of cars and lorries to deal with the issue.
As a result
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 of these policies, the ensuing reports for both 2016 and 2017 respectively demonstrate a considerable decrease in the amount car crashes and casualties.
On the other hand
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,
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 putting caps on the amount of
speed
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speeding
 drivers are allowed to exceed is effective, it is not the most efficient way of dealing with problem of
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 accidents. Building new roads as well as promoting the
use
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 of public
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 are the most efficient policies to enhance
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 on highways.
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, constructing new
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 networks will certainly improve traffic flow and decrease vehicle
frequency thereby
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frequency, thereby
 lowering the potential risk of accidents.
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, governments can encourage people to
use
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 public
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 by improving the quality of
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 facilities, and making them more affordable.
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Therefore many
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Therefore, many
 people will be tempted to take a comfortable and affordable bus or train commute to work or to a shopping centre rather than
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 their own cars. To conclude, lowering speed of automobiles can prove to be an effective strategy
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for
of
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security
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, yet it is not the most efficient strategy. In my opinion, building new roads and encouraging the
use
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 of public
transport
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 are ultimately superior methods.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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