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Question--Some people say that TV Advertisement have benefits, while others believe the opposite. Discuss both views , give your own opinion and include examples from your experience

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Most of the individuals believe that TV advertisements have benefits
where as
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Whereas
Where as
 others believe the opposite. In the following paragraph I am going to converse both merits and demerits with some examples. To embark with
,
Accept space
,
 TV advertisements are informative as they introduce a variety of products and their qualities. It will be
more easier
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easier
 for people to decide what they need. The the more there will be
variety
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varied
 more will be the competition in the market.
This
 will make the companies to produce a better
product
.
For instance
, if the buyer
do not know
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does not know
 about the quality of the
product
then
 he may end up getting worse
product
.
However
, the advertisements may show their fake side by hiding their true side. The people just buy the thing only by watching
advertisement
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an advertisement
the advertisement
 in which its positive is shown and don't make much effort to search the real thing. Companies with good financial status are showing their advertisements more and more as they are able to spend more money, whether it is a good or a bad
product
. The companies with the best
product
 may lag behind due to the lack of resources and
money
Suggestion
Money
. To conclude, TV Advertisement is the best way for companies to increase their production.
Although
, some rich companies are taking its advantage in a wrong way.
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