Nowadays many adults have full time jobs and the proportion of their lives spent on work is very high. Some of them are under high stress and ignore their other. What are cause and effects?

Whilst, some men and women do full
time
placement and
segment
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segments
a segment
of their lives exhaust on is completely elevate while some grow up are under high tension and ignore
disdain other part
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the disdain other part
disdain other parts
of
life
. I would discuss both views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are myriad origin and outcome why I claim that the individuals are under high pressure. The
first
and an important reason, some mankind do long
time
work
for their basic needs
;
Accept space
;
these days everything is expensive.
such
Suggestion
Such
as grocery, education and other objects. To buy these things is necessary. They give overtime to their
work
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
they forget
other part
Suggestion
other parts
the other part
of
life
.
Moreover
, some people want to live luxury
Lifestyle
Suggestion
Life style
.
Thus they
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Thus, they
spend
hour
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an hour
hours
and hour on
work
place.
Furthermore
, if human being doing job for
long
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a long time
time
daily
then
it would be harmful for their health;
also
they will under strain. Which would be adverse for
body
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the body
.
In addition
, more
time
spent on
work
is decent for
experience
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experience, however
however
it
also
uncooperative for mentally tensity. It is important for every person to live their
life
with enjoyment and happiness. It
reduce
Suggestion
reduces
work
tension and
also
fresh mind do
better job
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a better job
.
Thus
, profession
time
should be limited so that everyone can live
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
moment of
life
.
Similarly
, they
can not
can not
cannot
give their
time
to family and children due to hectic schedule
then
some are relationships break. So it is as well as mentally disturb human mind. In the conclusion, for masses what is necessary,
however
job
time
should be limited
.
Accept space
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
that everyone
will be enjoy
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will be enjoyed
other part of
live
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life
.
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