Watching television is bad for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Watching
television
is considered by many people that are harmful to children.
However
, in my opinion, I somehow agree with
this
perspective as it
contain
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contains
both merits and drawbacks.
First
and foremost,
one
of the principal
disadvantage
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disadvantages
of watching
television
is
having the
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having, the
chances to develop
healthy
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health
problems
such
as
vision problem
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vision problems
the vision problem
. When children spend most of their
times
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time
on watching their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
TV
programs namely
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programs, namely
cartoon, the light which released from
television
will definitely cause their
eyes
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eye
damage.
Furthermore
, lack of concentration while studying is
also
one
of the drawbacks
cause
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causes
by watching
television
. To illustrate, children who addicted to watching
television
will put all their focus on
TV
and
consequently
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consequent
consequential
loss the interest
on
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in
studying.
Nevertheless
, it is commonly believed that watching
television
also contain
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also contains
benefits to children. Indeed, children will
also
feel stress when live in a circumstance where having
plethora
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a plethora
of homework. When watching
television
, it is able to help them release the stress and make them feel enjoy and relax.
In addition
, allow them to spend their free time on watching
TV
can prevent them to commit crimes.
For instance
,
one
of the reasons of youth crimes
is due to children feel
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has due to children felt
feels due to children
is due to children to feel
is due to children feel
bored on their free time. Provide them some after-school activities
such
as watching
TV
is
one
of the effective
method
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methods
to avoid
this
problem. In the conclusion, undoubtedly, children who spend their time wisely while watching
TV
will contain advantages. Despite, we cannot ignore the drawbacks from watching
TV
.
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