Doctors in many countries say that people do not do enough physical exercises. What are the causes of this trend? How can the situation be improved?

In
this
modern globalized world, there is
increase
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an increase
in
number
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the number
of people who are suffering from diseases. According to doctors, people are physically inactive. There are many reasons that
has led
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have led
to
this
situation. In
this
essay, I will discuss the reasons and possible solutions to get out of
this
unhealthy lifestyle. Our lifestyles have been affected by the remarkable advancement in the technology and
this
has impacted the daily life and
health
of humans. In offices, most of the work is done on the computers. Without any break, people sit in front of computers and
same
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the same
goes for people who watch televisions at home or children who play video games.
Mostly
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Most
have televisions installed in their bedrooms.
This
affects the
health
of adults. According to a medical survey issued by
medical association
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the medical association
medical associations
of England, continuous exposure to computer screens causes depression, stress, anxiety, diabetes, heart as well as problem related to
eyes
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the eyes
.
Moreover
, people are becoming lazy to cook healthy
food
rather they rely on cheap takeaway
food
,
that is
mostly processed and is full of calories, fat, etc. No exercise and unhealthy
food
takes
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take
toll
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a toll
on the
health
of the individuals. It is the responsibility of individuals, parents, teachers and government as a whole to help people transition from unhealthy to healthy lifestyle. The individuals need to monitor their
food
habits so that they can include those foods that really helps them maintain good
health
and active lifestyle. Government can restrict unhealthy fast
food
stores especially
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stores, especially
near schools. As it has been seen that school children are more prone to buying fast foods
such
as fried foods and soft drinks. By introducing the concept of open gyms, government can motivate people to do physical exercises in
natural setting
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a natural setting
rather than a closed space gym and are accessible to everyone. To conclude, we as individuals and government has responsibility for the
health
of its citizens.
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