Some People believe that Money is a source of happiness while some disagree. What is your opinion on this?

Money is a generally acceptable tool
that is
used for exchange of good and services and to complete transactions. In as much as money make things happen, I disagree that it should be a sole source of happiness.
Firstly
, Money makes a man to have a good platform for a fulfilling
life but
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life, but
living a disciplined and purposeful
life
vis-a-vis pursuing success in one's field and reaching someone's goal in record offers more happiness, something that money does not guarantee!
Also
, it is generally agreed that health is wealth.
Living a
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Living, a
health conscious
life
by keeping fit through regular exercise, ensuring adequate and balanced diet, and timely treatment of illness will promote a healthy
life
and
therefore
a happy
life
.
In addition
, keeping a family-oriented lifestyle where one
have
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has
regular gathering with family
members promotes
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members, promotes
harmonious relationships, and expels all
form
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forms
of stress emanating from one's job and business,
hence
a happy
life
. In conclusion, in as much as money I'd a good tool to get transactions done, it does not necessarily determine happiness as purpose-driven
life
, healthy lifestyles and family togetherness offers so much more!

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