Some people believe that unpaid community services should be part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree?

It is believed by
certain group
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a certain group
of individuals that children ought to be busy at all times,
thus
, free community services should be in
ulcated
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locating
located
in the secondary
school
time tables
a schedule listing events and the times at which they will take place
timetables
. In my opinion, voluntary environmental services are quite
beneficial but
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beneficial, but
, should only be considered at certain periods. One good reason to make unpaid services part of the high
school
curriculum is to keep them busy at all times
,
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,
as some people believe that most crimes are committed when a
child
is idle.
For example
, if a
child
is busy with clearing of the bushes along the roads with others, there would not be enough free times for the
child
to think of any evil or crime to commit
such
as, picking of pockets.
On the other hand
, other people found the suggestion as detrimental because
,
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,
they believe that involvement in
such
activity would prevent most children from studying well
,
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,
thereby performing poorly in their academics.
For example
, some children who are not doing so well in
school
would require much time to be taught and groomed well but, when included in
such
extra activities would turn worse.
Finally
, in my view, voluntary activities for
school
pupils is beneficial, as it would help them to acquire some basic skills on how to do some works like, cutting of grasses and sweeping of the
environments but
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environments, but
,
this
should be done only during holidays to avoid clashing with their academic and class works or becoming so much stress to any
child
. In conclusion, there are merits and demerits of including
voluntary community
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voluntary, community
services in high
school
programs but, if
period
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the period
of involvement is considered, it would be a plus
to
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for
many students.
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