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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is generally believed that following news and articles keeps one abreast of happenings in the world.
Although
, in some countries, a significantly less number of young people are inclined towards reading newspaper or viewing news on television. Plethora of reasons
contribute
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contributes
 to the same
such
 as lack of interest among
the young
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the younger
 population and
further
, important steps
needs
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need
 to be taken to combat with the issue. In recent times, social media has had a substantial impact on the lives of
youth
. The proliferation of the social media has led to a decline in their interest of following the current affairs. Young people tend to read
latest
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the latest
 happenings in the world through the internet feed.
This
 can make the young mind think they are following the latest news, but
on the contrary
, their grasping power is
reducing
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reduced
.
Moreover
, reading via the social media is similar to skimming the news wherein the opinions of the individual is not developed. What is more, the
youth
 seems like not cared enough about the economy or politics which tends to shape the nation. Crucial steps need to be taken by both government and communities to tackle with the issue.
Firstly
, an awareness needs to be created among young individuals so that they can come to know as to how their participation can aid economies at large.
Secondly
, introducing subject or projects in schools or colleges can automatically lead students to follow reading newspaper or watching
news which
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news, which
 can
further
 help in developing their own views on the subject. In conclusion, it is extremely important for the
youth
 to follow news or reading
dailies
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the dailies
 as they would be the decision makers in the near future. In the rapid declining of interest in matters related to politics or
economy
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the economy
, crucial steps
such
 as generating awareness among
youth
 need to be taken by communities to ensure that the young minds have a critical role to play in the development of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
.
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