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Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

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Nowadays, many high school graduates have been advised to take a gap
year
 before
university
.
Although
 some people believe that it is helpful, others as well as
myself
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe it to be a
waste
 of
time
. Many believe that by taking a
year
 off, students can use
this
time
 to do various things that can benefit their
university
 lives. During
this
 gap students can go and volunteer in countries that are underprivileged. By doing so they can gain a sense of fulfilment and a better insight on the world around them.
Furthermore through
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Furthermore, through
 their volunteer work, they will be exposed to many different challenges through these
challenges they
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challenges, they
 will be able to grow as a human.
However
, by taking a sabbatical
year
 students if not used wisely could end up being a complete
waste
 of
time
. Many graduates believe that they can use their sabbatical to take an internship at large companies or hospitals to prepare them for their
university
 life.
However as
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However, as
 they are merely a high school graduate, many companies refuse to let them intern as they would prefer a
university
 student. If a graduate does not get an internship or have the money to go abroad and do volunteering they could
waste
 a whole
year
 as they did not find anything useful to do. In conclusion,
although
 taking a
year
 off before
university
 can help students grow, if the graduate does not use their
time
properly it
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properly, it
 can be a total
waste
 of
time
 and money.
Therefore
, I believe that students should go straight to
university
.
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