In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. Whet are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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Recently, there has been a significant change in both family
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and roles.
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essay considers
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transformation as a retrogressive type and
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examines the different changes occurring. There are various types of reorganization that are common to various families these days.
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to consider is a recent practice whereby the wive is recognized as the head of the family. In
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settings, it the wife who pays the
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bride price
of the
husband
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and contribute more financially to the marital rites.The Idoma tribe of Edo state is a good example in
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case as the wife is the one who goes to work while the
husband
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stays at home to take care of household chores. Another common instance, is to have women playing the roles of the man nowadays. The female gender is usually considered limited in roles in many
settings but
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settings, but
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is no longer the case. In
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present dispensation, wives
do not
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do, not
only do the same type of jobs like their
husband
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, but
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work
same number
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the same number
of hours like them.
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pattern of organization has been rated
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predominantly
in many big cities around the world from demographic information on the United nations website. In my own view, I consider
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this changes
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these changes
in both
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and told in an unpleasant light. As a matter of fact, the consequences are both disgusting and unappealing. When wives are culturally empowered to be recognized as the head of the family, it depresses the ego of the man and makes him feel unhappy.
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situation can increase the risk of
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a man for health problems
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as depression. A good number of men are not able to tolerate
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the state or fact of existing
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directed by their wives at home,
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makes them an object of ridicule among their mates who sees them as weak and friable. According to a recent publication on family health available online
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the rate of depression among
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men is almost triple that of families where there is no change in
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.Another point to consider, is the neglect suffered by the children when the mother is the one working to provide money for the family.
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children are not properly catered for and are prone to various degrees of abuses. Children from these
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types
of homes are more likely to be influenced by their peers. They submit to peer
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pressure
and participate in various vices due to poor supervision and parentage. In conclusion, the recent changes in
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the role
roles
and
structure
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in families have brought about disheartening consequences
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as psychological trauma and poor parentage and
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has been explored in
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piece. It is
imperative
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imperative, therefore
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for families to maintain the old practice of having the
husband
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as the head of the home and the one who provides for the need of the family.
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