Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on the child. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years, leisure
time
spent by the younger generation has become debatable. Some individuals share the
opinion
that
time
spent on activities
such
as watching television, playing
video
or computer games can be profitable while others are of the
opinion
that these activities causes more harm than good. I am of the latter
opinion
.
This
essay will discuss both views as well as state the effects of these activities on the younger generation. On the one hand, individuals are of the view that
time
spent on activities like television,
video
and computer games are beneficial mainly because these activities keep the youths occupied during their leisure
time
. The belief is that
instead
of younger peers joining bad gangs and associating with the wrong
crowd they
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crowd, they
would rather benefit from
such
activities. Take
for instance
, a high school student after the day’s
activities join
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activities, join
friends in smoking and drinking
instead
of going home and enjoying a TV show.
Thus
, it’s believed that
such
activities
keeps
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keep
the younger generation occupied.
In addition
, these activities relaxes the mind and body. According to a research carried out by the famous Dr Odumosu Bunmi in the early ‘
80s which
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80s, which
suggested that children are likely to excel in school activities, if they engage in activities at home that relaxes the mind and body
such
as watching TV shows or playing games.
However
, despite these undeniable benefits I am of the
opinion
that the cons outweighs the pros. The main reason for
this
is
addiction
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addictive
. Young individuals these days get addicted to
such
great activities. A research was published by the National Health
Institution
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Institute
in 2017.
This
showed that about 80% of youths are addicted to both
video
games as well as computer games and about 20% to
television
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televisions
.
Furthermore
, these activities
makes
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make
the youth very lazy. They
would rather
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would, rather
than help their society or communities and parents, watch or play
video
games. These cons have overshadowed the benefits of these activities. Overall, while there are great benefits
such
as relaxing the mind and body and occupying
time
, there are
also
great consequences. I am of the
opinion
that the cons outweighs the pros and that youths should
instead
of watching tv shows and playing
video
games can engage in other productive activities
such
as feeding the homeless, cleaning the communities and public awareness of illegal drugs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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