The society would benefit from ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

In recent times, advertising of goods and services is becoming increasingly popular. Both individuals and organisations explore
this
method to get their products known and to increase sales.
However
, some think that it should be prohibited because some adverts displayed are irrelevant to them.
Also
, some contain erotic scenes which could have
negative effect
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a negative effect
on children. I completely disagree with
this
view because they can be censored, and they are used for sponsorship. Some people oppose advertising, and
this
is a result of the frequent ad posts everywhere like on
billboard
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a billboard
billboards
by the roadside, in between TV programmes or pop-ups on the internet. Most of these posts are of no interest to
them
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them, therefore
therefore
they consider it not beneficial.
In addition
, many commercials these days like that of cars or perfumes brands displays nudity which is inappropriate for children. The ladies are shown
on
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in
underwear in the videos in other to get the attention of customers.
This
has a negative effect on younger viewers because they may copy and misinterpret
this
act. Advertising should not be banned because it has many benefits.
However
, promotions with adult scenes can be censored for younger viewers. It is
also
a means to get sponsorship for events, TV programmes, magazine and newspapers. Newspapers and magazines
for instance
, revenue generated from advertising helps reduce the selling price of these items.
Thus
, it becomes affordable for people to purchase. To summarise,
although
some people believe that commercials should be prohibited for some reasons
such
as lack of purpose and inappropriate dressing in ads, I think that companies use advert as part of their marketing strategy to promote sales and in some case to raise fund.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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