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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most people still don’t take responsibility to protect their environment. Why is this? What can be done to encourage people to protect their environment

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It is essential to keep the area where we live free from harm.
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 harm could be in various forms.
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 people are aware of
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, many do not make it a point to duty to ensure their environs are properly maintained.
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 essay will discuss how
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a lack
 of awareness and cost of maintenance are the major reasons that leads to
poor human attitude
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a poor human attitude
 to environmental protection.
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, solutions will be proffered to how these problems can be averted.
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, most individuals already have the basic knowledge that it is vital to live in a well looked after
environment
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, but they do not see it as their responsibility to take charge of it. They are unaware of the severe damages of
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 unhealthy practises may cause in the long term. Some believe that only the
government
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 should pay attention to it.
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, it is expensive to take care of the
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environment
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environment, therefore
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 people tend to shy away from the cost of ensuring their area is free from all kinds of environmental harm.
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, in
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the Lagos plethora
 of people dump their
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waste
 by the road side expecting the
government
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 to help clean it up and cater the refuse away. The issues surrounding protecting the
environment
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 can best be solved both by the
government
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 and the individuals living in a given area.
Government
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 can develop policies to encourage people to take it as a duty to ensure these problems are put to a halt. A reward scheme for the most cautious person and a punishment plan for defaulters. Awareness campaigns and seminars should be scheduled on a regular basis to keep the public informed of the dangers of residing in an unsafe
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.
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 way more person will get interested in making it their business. In conclusion, in as much as many have a general idea of why a clean and safe
environment
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 is paramount, people do not want to be involved in the process due to lack of indebt knowledge about its dangers. Everyone which includes the
government
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 and the public have a role to play in ensuring we live in an environmentally secure society.
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