Some people believe that in order to give opportunities to new generation, companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree? Why?

It is true that nowadays, a lot of
enterprises encourage
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enterprises, encourage
qualified old employees to retire to make up room for the young ones. In my opinion,
this
decision is absolutely misguided. There are some indisputable advantages of having older people working for companies. The main benefit is that they have a huge amount of experiences which have been accumulated during over a decade. Thanks to their life capital and experiences, they will have enough abilities and skills to face harsh responsibilities and solve awkward problems in their firms as well. Another perk is most of old workers have strong professional networks and client networks because they have built work relationships and cooperated with a lot of counterparts for a long time.
Therefore
, they are likely to not only help companies have chance to affiliate with
others but
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others, but
also
increase selling products of firms in which they are working for.
In contrast
, young people tend to lack much knowledge for their career path compared to
old
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older
people.
Firstly
,
they
of them or themselves
their
lack of skills which are necessary for their jobs and the relationship with colleagues.
Thus
, they are possible to not complete all assigned tasks and fail to handle pressure.
For example
, many young employees quit because of the inability to cope with the cramped workload and work condition.
Secondly
, young people lack of stability because they have no clear vision of their career. They are willing to switch to other companies which offer them
better opportunity
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better opportunities
a better opportunity
without thinking about their old one.
This
will be a huge loss to the organization since their effort and time invested in training for young workers are not profitable. In conclusion, I firmly believed that employers should keep their proficient old workers to contribute to their companies and help them prosper.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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