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The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution s can you suggest.

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In most countries, especially the developing and the underdeveloped ones, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer
thus
,
Accept space
,
increasing the gap between them.
Although
 there are so many problems associated with
this
, there are
also
 ways to solve them. One important problem that could arise from the increased gap between the rich and the poor is unequal
accessibility
Suggestion
access
 to tertiary
education
.
For example
, in Nigeria where tuition is very high for university
education
, only the wealthy ones could access
this
 level of
education
 thereby leaving the
unwealthy
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 persons behind.
Also
, there is reduced marriage between the two extremes as the richer parents would not accept their children's marriage to commoners.
This
 is
also
 very obtainable in Nigeria where there is a notion
by
Suggestion
of
 the upper class that
such
 marriage could tarnish their
images
Suggestion
image
.
Lastly
, most commoners found it difficult to air their views in the society because they feel that the wealthier ones attract more audience even when their opinions are wrong. The
first
 solution to these problems is for the government to enhance free
education
, especially at the tertiary level so that all citizens would feel equal.
This
 helps to ensure that people from inferior background still have right to universal
education
.
Secondly
, massive employment if enhanced would go a long way in providing solutions to
this
, and employment should be based on merit following interviews
instead
 of through connections. By so doing there would be less space between the
buoyants
railroad track having two movable rails and necessary connections; used to turn a train from one track to another or to store rolling stock
points
 and the non
buoyants
railroad track having two movable rails and necessary connections; used to turn a train from one track to another or to store rolling stock
points
.
Finally
, government offices should be restructured
such
 that less monetary value is attached to any political position thereby making the seats available for all. In conclusion, despite the defaults associated with increasing space between the luxurious and non luxurious individuals, there are
also
 many possible and rewarding solutions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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