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Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There has been an unending debate in the society as to who is responsible for proper maintenance of our
environment
. Some hold the view that
onus
Suggestion
the onus
 is on individuals to ensure a clean
environment
 while others believed the state should oversee
this
. I believe keeping our
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 clean is the responsibility of both
government
 and the people. Those that hold the view that individuals should cater
for
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to
 their
environment
 believe so because people are closer to the
environment
.
This
 proximity
give
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gives
 room for citizens to clean their immediate surrounding.
This
 can be done through the use of
waste
 bin, recycling plastics and incineration. By disposing
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 their rubbish properly; the
environment
 will be tidy. As for others, who are of the opinion that the state should take charge of
this
 responsibility, they do so because
government
Suggestion
the government
 is expected to provide social amenities and keeping the
environment
 clean is part of
this
. Since, funds are available to them in abundance, they expect that
waste
 deposal and environmental sanitation should solely be their responsibility.
For instance
, in Lagos state, there is an agency created by the
government
 to manage
waste
 disposal and ensure
clean
Suggestion
a clean environment
environment
, they
also
 enact laws against open defecation and reckless disposal of solid
waste
.
This
 has been keeping Lagos tidy. In conclusion, keeping the
environment
 clean is germane for healthy living. I hold a view that we are all responsible for keeping it fit. Individuals should ensure that they dispose their
waste
 properly using appropriate mean for each category of rubbish and the
government
 on her part should create
functioning agency
Suggestion
a functioning agency
 to cater for community
waste
 with adequate laws to support them.
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