Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do? Or do you feel children have enough education at school?

Nowadays, many parents arrange private tuitions for their children outside the
school
as they consider that
this
practice will help their kids to COPE with immense education pressure. Not to speak
of only
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of, only
parents who are keen to provide extra classes after
school
hours to their kids, even, schools are
also
transforming into a full-day study centre.
Additionally
, there is a cut throat competition among all the schools to hold the number one position in their city,
therefore
, they do not leave any stone unturned. They do not want to show any
loop hole
an ambiguity (especially one in the text of a law or contract) that makes it possible to evade a difficulty or obligation
loophole
in their education system. All these practices can cause unnecessary burden on kids.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, from
last
many years education sector has emerged a lot, most schools are not just educating children in the science, languages and mathematics. They concentrate on
HOLISTIC development
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the HOLISTIC development
of children. Every now and
then
there are seminars, competitions and extra classes as well as special attention to be given to all the students. These extra-curricular activities always provide great help to students.
Also
in some schools due to
large number
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a large number
of pupils, teachers are unable to concentrate on each and every student and
this
search end up by getting additional help from outside. What is more, extra tuitions are always beneficial for weaker students who find it hard to grasp everything related to vast subjects with deeper knowledge in schools. In these cases extra help provided to them after
school
hours
work
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works
as
boon
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a boon
for them. To conclude, children can be benefitted by getting
this
extra help, studying after
school
hours, should be encouraged among them.
However
, pressurising students unnecessarily to get into studies all day is not an ideal idea.
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