In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

Children are the future of the nation and
thus
it is the nation’s duty and responsibility along with the parents to nurture them properly and in a good way.
This
will
also
include making rules and regulations
by
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of
in
the country. Though some countries are way too lenient, some countries put up strict rules for
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. In
this
essay, I will be discussing about that
too which
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too, which
extent the rules should strict the
children
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child's
children's
child
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. I think that the rules and regulations are necessary for the grooming of the kids and for providing them information about the discipline.
Moreover
, being disciplined from early ages helps them to become a great asset later. But it is
also
necessary that the cuteness and
kindness
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the kindness
of the children should not be harmed at the stake of strictness.
This
will not allow them to bloom properly and have a proper understanding about what to do and what not do and why not to do.
Similarly
, if a nation makes a rule for not allowing kids to play or mingle in public garden or
parks
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parks, then
then
it will restrict them to interact with
neighborhood kids
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the neighbourhood kids
neighbourhood kids
and might feel lonely as they will never be able to interact with any other
kids
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kids'
post
the time that has elapsed
past
school hours. Becoming
non
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a non
-social will stop them from being open hearted and talk about what they feel and in future might suffer because of that. For an instance, US has no federal minimum age for the possession of
long gun
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long guns
a long gun
.
This
makes it easier for even the early teenagers to have a licensed gun. They are not that matured and
thus
a lot of mishaps happen by
them
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. If there would have been a limit of 18 or 21
then
this
would have been curtailed. As per me, the rules should be there for
children but
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children, but
they should be progressive and not restrictive. They should be designed in
such
a way that it takes care of the welfare of the children and
also
the nation.

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