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In many countries, mainly tourist, but not local people visit museums and local sites, does this happen, and what can be done to attract more people to visit these places?

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Whilst, Art Gallery and historical sites are less attractive for native masses them to tourist. I would discuss about
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 and an important cause is that, the local people take these places for granted. They think that these places are not running anywhere, so that they will see sooner or later.
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, people have seldom time for to see these places.
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this reason individuals
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this reason, individuals
 take time from their hectic schedule to watch historical places.
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, tourist who come there are on a holiday, and their main motive is visiting
these gallery
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this gallery
these galleries
 and historical places.
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I visited Hyderabad tourist and went to see Ramoji Film City which is the biggest Film City
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 is the biggest Film City in the whole word; my relative who staying in Hyderabad
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has never been
had never been
 there once. When I told them they decided to visit with their children.
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, nothing new is added to these places over the years public who have been there once, do not wish to frequent these places again and again.
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, museum and historical sites are not cheap to visit in fact visitor are often required to buy expensive tickets. Contrary above the statement super up more mankind coming to
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the museum
. School trips could be organised for children to enjoy these places
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 day free for local mankind art gallery
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 the conclusion, reasons can be given to why lose their and tourism place of exhibition.
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